I thoroughly enjoyed reading these entries. Generally, the stories were of a very high standard and there was a fair understanding of the children’s fiction genre.
That said, the top two stood out miles above the rest because they included all of the following elements:
- believable dialogue
- well thought out and communicated plots
- scares and laughs
- fantastic grammar and structure
- well defined characters
- they were pure enjoyment to read
While the other stories also had one or two elements from this list, these two had them all. Other common weaknesses I saw in some of the stories was a lack of understanding regarding grammar, a confusing storyline and stilted dialogue. These are easily fixed with practise and more editing, so keep at it. Please take all critiques of your work as an indication that you have potential as a writer but merely need to do some more work.
Thank you for the privilege of reading your stories. I want to commend everyone who entered. Putting your work into the public arena for people to read is always difficult but you did it! Well done.
Haunted House by Jenny Young
This story is perfect! I absolutely loved reading it. It was extremely well written, the character’s personalities were established early in the story, there was believable dialogue, moments of utter hilarity (I laughed out loud) and a wonderful sense of childhood whimsy.
I feel as though this story is ready to publish.